Show not tell.

WALT: show our audience with our words rather than directly tell - 'Show not Tell'.

Work with a partner to see if you can rewrite one of these  to ‘Show not Tell’

I felt angry: I threw my book onto the floor,
I messed up my room as I slammed the door,
I screamed as loud as I could.

It was a sunny day: The sun was bursting onto my head and arms,
My arms are burning.
as I was sweating I was holding an umbrella
going into the water but I was running out.  

It was cold at the beach: I put my jacket on,
I put my hands together and I started to rub them together,
I put gloves on and a scurf.

Brainstorm as many different ideas as you can that show that it was cold at the beach.

Brainstorm: putting extra gloves on, putting Scarf on, putting my Jacket on,
Rubbing my hands, Blowing on my hands to keep them warm,
The wind was strong and the wind was blowing my hair all around.

Now try to write a paragraph using these ideas that shows it was cold at the beach,
without using the words beach or cold
(don't just switch the word cold to another adjective such as freezing
as that is still just telling. - Try to show that you are cold.
Think about how you are feeling/what you are doing/what you see/hear/feel to help show this.

I put my jumper and jacket on,
I put my gloves on my hands,
I put a scarf around my neck as I was rubbing my hands together,
I put extra socks and gloves on.
I blew onto my hands to get them warm,
I was rubbing my legs and arms together.
The sky was grey and the waves were big and clashing together
the was under the clouds nowhere to be found.

We are learning to show our audience with our words rather than directly tell -'Show not tell'.